作文备考：创造闪光点 作文亮一点！
ebQYk$@ 作文是各类英语考试中得分率最低的题型之一。同学们在掌握了一定的作文模板，和基本的语法、词汇、句型用法之后，如果能在作文中创造一些词汇和句型的闪光点，必定会使你的作文如虎添翼！
A]>0l B 高分作文标志:
<;acWT?( 1：是否长短句交叉；沪江四六级
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3、用词是否多样，准确，形象，尽量使用能够吸引阅卷老师眼球的闪光词；
7IFUsli] 4、关键词是否换用，切勿老用重复词；
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8mMrGf[Q\ 1. 适当用被动替换主动，这样能更客观的反映事实, 句子开头不要总是用we / I (比如写结尾时不用we should pay attention to而用Attention should be paid to. ) 举个经典结尾2004年六月六级作文的最后一段：It is ,therefore, high time that some applicable approaches were implemented by the service industry like that. By doing so，its competitive edge will be sharpened effectively. 沪江四六级
http://cet.hjenglish.com {)`5*sd 2. 善于使用插入语，比如说把副词、连接词等，作插入语放在中间，一般放在主语、动词或者助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。
J]Y." hi 如however / therefore /for example/I believe 做插入语放在中间，一般放在动词，助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。
u(d>R5}' 比如说： Other individuals, however, take the attitude that …
R*QL6t 3. 一定要学会换词，换形象，具体的替换太宽泛的。(考试中一般不要出现good, bad , many, thing, think,
r Y c?y people, opinion 等等)比如上面例子中，applicable替换proper, approaches替换ways, implement替换carry out, sharpen one’s competitive edge替换enhance one’s competitiveness(提高某物竞争力)
bk"` hq 下面举一篇南京工程学院某位同学写的优秀作文(14分)的例子，看看他是如何运用各类写作技巧的。这位同学把老师上课讲的各类写作手法和精彩替换和句型都用上了，作文有了很大的提高。
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5A"TNU I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that I indulged myself in googling an army of useful information I had expected ,and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.
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r$*k-c9Bf thrilling 替换 exciting
Fnr*.k sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb 替换 sb. be interested in sth.
v6iV#yz3( google 替换 search
=<FFFoF*C_ an army of 替换 a lot of
\z< '6,b The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say we have been submerged by them, in large measure!
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#{< Jm?sU Current ( currently )替换 now
P3(u+ UI3 Appeal to sb. 替换 sb. be interested in sth.
^${-^w@,%V Growing individuals 替换 more and more people
.lRO; D It is no exaggeration to say 经典句型， 说某事是毫不夸张的
nuXaZRH For a start, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment . Little by little, our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. Additionally, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email.
,]Hn*\@p[c For a start 替换 To begin with
DUY#RJf We can, freely, search 用了插入语的写作手法
:m-HHWMN our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. 用了非常精彩的被动
#y2="$ V Additionally 替换 In addition / Besides
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k1B7uA'h"G Emerging 替换 appearing ( fading 替换 disappearing ) Net citizen 网民，属于精彩用词
o^_z+JFwb As a classic proverb goes that no garden has no weeds. Computers do play a positive role in the development of people' lives, despite a slice of unfavorable impacts. We should, therefore, take advantage of the fruits and avoid the opposite facet.
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No garden has no weeds 替换 Every coin has two sides
#^#N%_8 Computers do play ，do 强调
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6-<,1Q'D A slice of 替换 a part of
N2 =gSEY Unfavorable 替换 bad
5qB>Song Impacts 替换 effects / influences
>.Q D:_@: We should, therefore, take advantage of … 使用插入语
jb fMTb4 Fruits (而且fruits 用的非常形象， merits/ virtues) 替换 advantage ( defects 替换 disadvantage ) Facet 替换 aspect
O*!+D- 以下是27个经典的替换词，各位同学可以参考一下:
e-\J!E'1F 1.individuals,characters, folks替换(people ,persons)
a)[t kjU 2: positive, favorable, rosy (美好的)，promising
lvc X}{>\ (有希望的)，perfect, pleasurable , excellent, outstanding, superior替换good
r'k-*I 3:dreadful, unfavorable, poor, adverse, ill (有害的)替换bad
x)nBy)< 如果bad做表语，可以有be less impressive替换
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vQYd!DSh 5: a slice of, quiet a few , several替换some
h}rrsVj3 6:harbor the idea that, take the attitude that, hold the view that, it is widely shared that, it is universally acknowledged that)替think (因为是书面语，所以要加that)
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{Km|SG[-q 10:for my part ,from my own perspective 替换 in my opinion
Q/-Y Lf. 11: Increasing(ly), growing 替换more and more ( 注意没有growingly这种形式。所以当修饰名词时用increasing/growing.修饰形容词，副词用increasingly.
UYGl Eg. Sth has gained growing popularity. Sth is increasingly popular with the advancement of sth.
,5H$Tm,6\S 12..beneficial, rewarding替换helpful,
H\ 8.T:> 13.shopper,client,consumer,purchaser, 替换customer
$A8eMJEp L 14.exceedingly,extremely, intensely 替换very
:KMo'p L 15.sth appeals to sb, sth exerts a tremendous fascination on sb 替换sb take interest in / sb. be interested in
c[@>#7p`o 16.capture one's attention替换attract one's attention.沪
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nakhepLN 18.give rise to, lead to, result in, trigger 替换cause.
u,4,s[ 19.desire 替换want.
;(TBg-LEK 20.pour attention into 替换pay attention to
Xl@n v9m 21.bear in mind that 替换remember沪江四六级
http://cet.hjenglish.com _OHz 6ag 22. enjoy, possess 替换have(注意process是过程的意思)
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jM&9 24.frown on sth替换 be against , disagree with sth
/,$6`V 25.to name only a few, as an example替换 for example, for instance
]'DtuT?Z 25.bear in mind that 代替remember
0JK bp*H 26.to name only a few, as an example代替 for example
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http://cet.hjenglish.com 3QM.X ^ANH I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that i indulged myself in googling an army of useful information i had expected ,and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.
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JY_+p9KfyQ For a start, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment . Little by little, our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. Additionally, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email.
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