作文备考：创造闪光点 作文亮一点！
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#zsr:" 作文是各类英语考试中得分率最低的题型之一。同学们在掌握了一定的作文模板，和基本的语法、词汇、句型用法之后，如果能在作文中创造一些词汇和句型的闪光点，必定会使你的作文如虎添翼！
-`gC?yff: 高分作文标志:
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M6I1 `Lpf 3、用词是否多样，准确，形象，尽量使用能够吸引阅卷老师眼球的闪光词；
W"0 # 4、关键词是否换用，切勿老用重复词；
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/bb4nM_E/ 下面给出写好一篇作文的注意事项：
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http://cet.hjenglish.com p$=3&qR 6 2. 善于使用插入语，比如说把副词、连接词等，作插入语放在中间，一般放在主语、动词或者助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。
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l)|CPSN?w people, opinion 等等)比如上面例子中，applicable替换proper, approaches替换ways, implement替换carry out, sharpen one’s competitive edge替换enhance one’s competitiveness(提高某物竞争力)
r({( ; 下面举一篇南京工程学院某位同学写的优秀作文(14分)的例子，看看他是如何运用各类写作技巧的。这位同学把老师上课讲的各类写作手法和精彩替换和句型都用上了，作文有了很大的提高。
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a[u8x mH google 替换 search
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kS JWQ Current ( currently )替换 now
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|hpm|eZG"h It is no exaggeration to say 经典句型， 说某事是毫不夸张的
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kY|_wDBSb\ We can, freely, search 用了插入语的写作手法
p;p G@Vg our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. 用了非常精彩的被动
-Zu zJAA Additionally 替换 In addition / Besides
FVSz[n Deliver 替换 send
We9mkwK7C There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especially the growing violence, porn pictures emerging on the screen , which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.
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, :#prT[P" Emerging 替换 appearing ( fading 替换 disappearing ) Net citizen 网民，属于精彩用词
e8[ *=& As a classic proverb goes that no garden has no weeds. Computers do play a positive role in the development of people' lives, despite a slice of unfavorable impacts. We should, therefore, take advantage of the fruits and avoid the opposite facet.
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nc3 1X Computers do play ，do 强调
[<%yU y Positive 替换 important / good 等
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}&! rI U Unfavorable 替换 bad
P#yS ]F/ Impacts 替换 effects / influences
! g}9xIL We should, therefore, take advantage of … 使用插入语
+/Z:L$C6 Fruits (而且fruits 用的非常形象， merits/ virtues) 替换 advantage ( defects 替换 disadvantage ) Facet 替换 aspect
./6L&?*`~; 以下是27个经典的替换词，各位同学可以参考一下:
_h.[I8xgYG 1.individuals,characters, folks替换(people ,persons)
wPW9 bu 2: positive, favorable, rosy (美好的)，promising
;[6u79;I (有希望的)，perfect, pleasurable , excellent, outstanding, superior替换good
B0YY7od 3:dreadful, unfavorable, poor, adverse, ill (有害的)替换bad
xWV_Do)z 如果bad做表语，可以有be less impressive替换
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qV(Plt% 注：用many, if not most 一定要小心，many后一定要有词。
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` "9Y.KU 5: a slice of, quiet a few , several替换some
Pajr`gU 6:harbor the idea that, take the attitude that, hold the view that, it is widely shared that, it is universally acknowledged that)替think (因为是书面语，所以要加that)
gHm ^@ 7:affair ,business ,matter 替换thing
]])i"oew 8: shared 代 common
4BCZ~_ 9.reap huge fruits 替换get many benefits ) 沪
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kp0>8rkF 11: Increasing(ly), growing 替换more and more ( 注意没有growingly这种形式。所以当修饰名词时用increasing/growing.修饰形容词，副词用increasingly.
0 "> # h Eg. Sth has gained growing popularity. Sth is increasingly popular with the advancement of sth.
7u!p.kN 12..beneficial, rewarding替换helpful,
myXp]=Sb? 13.shopper,client,consumer,purchaser, 替换customer
W`;E-28Dg 14.exceedingly,extremely, intensely 替换very
sGzd c 15.sth appeals to sb, sth exerts a tremendous fascination on sb 替换sb take interest in / sb. be interested in
gsAcn 16.capture one's attention替换attract one's attention.沪
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K J~f ~2; 18.give rise to, lead to, result in, trigger 替换cause.
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yhTe*I=Gk 20.pour attention into 替换pay attention to
n[{o~VN 21.bear in mind that 替换remember沪江四六级
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O[-wm;_(=* 23. interaction替换communication沪江四六级
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$<T)_g 25.to name only a few, as an example替换 for example, for instance
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56L>tP 27. next to/virtually impossible,代替nearly impossible
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